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Silly Putty, one of the most popular toy items of the 50's and 60's, was originally developed as a possible substitute for rubber. In the 1940's, when the U. S. War Production Board was looking for an inexpensive replacement for synthetic rubber to use in jeep and airplane tires, gas masks, and other military gear, it asked General Electric to try to develop such a product. James Wright, the engineer who worked on the project, eventually developed a rubbery goo that stretched farther than rubber, rebounded 25 percent more than the best rubber ball, was impervious to molds and decay, and withstood a wide range of temperatures without decomposing. In addition, to the delight of children everywhere, when pressed against the color print of newspaper comic pages, it lifted the image right onto itself. Unfortunately, the new product really had no special advantages over synthetic rubber, so it was never used commercially, but it was not long before a man operating a toy store realized its possibilities and began to market it inside plastic colored eggs. In its first year, Silly Putty outsold every item in the toy store and for the next two decades was one of the most popular small toys in the country.
Average number of words per sentence in revised copy: 206 words and 6 sentences = 34.3 words per sentence.
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